This looks really interesting, although Chapter 1 began sufficiently in midstream/mid-conversation that initially I thought that I hadn’t quite reached the first page after all. The design for the fox-beings’ quadrupedal dimension-travelling/heavy-duty magic-using forms is very eyecatching and effective. The twins look like little fox-sphynxes with horns and freckles, while their devious and obviously no-average-kitsune (or whatever he is) father looks a lot less standard-human even around the face in that form.
Now that I’ve read more, it seems that the three-tailedness referred to early in the chapter must be some kind of metaphor for someone’s level of adeptness with magic, or something along those lines. So you’re doing pretty well on the whole at providing just enough clues to enable readers to figure out how this world works and to follow the action based on context and so on, once the story actually gets going. I’ll come back and read more later–since the next update is scheduled for September, I don’t want to gulp down the entire existing archive in one shot so that the wait for more feels even more endless than it would otherwise.
I really did start right in the middle of things, and I really appreciate you sticking around for it! And you got it, the tails are tiers for magic and power level rather than physical tails. I’m really glad to hear that the clues are present enough to pick up, I sometimes worry that I gloss over it a little too quickly. But on the other hand, I don’t want to bog down the story with trying to explain every little thing, either. Thanks so much for all your thoughtful comments!
I like it so far – and I’m personally a fan of minimal exposition, since you’ve done a pretty good job of providing enough background to make sense of things without bogging us down with everything there is to know about this place you’ve created. Definitely looking forward to more.
I’m glad to hear you’re enjoying it! I’m not a big fan of over the top exposition myself and prefer to keep moving the story along at a steady pace. At the same time, beginnings are important and it worries me a little that I don’t drop quite enough info yet, so I’m glad to hear that you’re following the story.
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This looks really interesting, although Chapter 1 began sufficiently in midstream/mid-conversation that initially I thought that I hadn’t quite reached the first page after all. The design for the fox-beings’ quadrupedal dimension-travelling/heavy-duty magic-using forms is very eyecatching and effective. The twins look like little fox-sphynxes with horns and freckles, while their devious and obviously no-average-kitsune (or whatever he is) father looks a lot less standard-human even around the face in that form.
Now that I’ve read more, it seems that the three-tailedness referred to early in the chapter must be some kind of metaphor for someone’s level of adeptness with magic, or something along those lines. So you’re doing pretty well on the whole at providing just enough clues to enable readers to figure out how this world works and to follow the action based on context and so on, once the story actually gets going. I’ll come back and read more later–since the next update is scheduled for September, I don’t want to gulp down the entire existing archive in one shot so that the wait for more feels even more endless than it would otherwise.
I really did start right in the middle of things, and I really appreciate you sticking around for it! And you got it, the tails are tiers for magic and power level rather than physical tails. I’m really glad to hear that the clues are present enough to pick up, I sometimes worry that I gloss over it a little too quickly. But on the other hand, I don’t want to bog down the story with trying to explain every little thing, either. Thanks so much for all your thoughtful comments!
I like it so far – and I’m personally a fan of minimal exposition, since you’ve done a pretty good job of providing enough background to make sense of things without bogging us down with everything there is to know about this place you’ve created. Definitely looking forward to more.
I’m glad to hear you’re enjoying it! I’m not a big fan of over the top exposition myself and prefer to keep moving the story along at a steady pace. At the same time, beginnings are important and it worries me a little that I don’t drop quite enough info yet, so I’m glad to hear that you’re following the story.
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